Firewood Processor Forum

Honest opinions on if it’s too corny or just bad writing. It is a first draft but feel free to hit me with all you’ve got =] Basically, these two are alone in the forest off on their adventure if you will XD Things are looking bad for them and they’re on the border of giving up. Oh, and FYI they were never really a couple although they did share a kiss long before all the terrible things began.

She sat by the crackling fire, a small light in massive darkness that surrounded them. Her usually vibrant face was masked with an uncharacteristic sadness. He wanted to comfort her but, even through this endeavour and the time they’d spent alone, they had grown further apart than they’d ever been.

“How are you feeling?” he asked sitting down beside her. The words were empty but the best he could manage.

“Tired,” she confessed. “I can’t sleep.” He saw the familiar distant look in her eyes that were fixated on the flames. He hesitated for a moment, unable to respond, unable to promise her things that he couldn’t be sure of. She sighed quietly. “I just can’t shake this feeling that with every passing minute, we come closer to the end.”

“I would never let anything happen to you,” he said instantly. He might not have been able to tell her that everything would turn out alright but that was a promise he knew he would keep... at whatever cost.

“I know,” she said, finally breaking her gaze from the fire. Looking into her eyes brought back the feelings that he didn’t want to revisit. It wasn’t what she needed. They held their look for just a moment too long.

“I’ll get some more firewood,” he said quickly moving away.

“Faylen,” she said, her hand reaching for his shoulder. “Thank you... for everything.” It happened in an instant. One moment they were just there and the next they were locked in a kiss. However, it wasn’t like before. It was something new and passionate, forceful even, as though this could be the last chance they would get to be together. His thoughts began to trail away and he could feel his self-control disintegrate with each movement. His hands found her waist and pulled her closer to him but suddenly she froze and, for a moment, he thought he had taken things too far but she didn’t pull away. Instead, her hands gripped his collar as she fell back onto the ground gently pulling him on top of her.

It was his turn to break away. He looked down at her carefully supporting his weight above her. They shared a mutual understanding of where this would lead. “Is this really what you want?” he asked. He didn’t want to push her into anything, to feel as though he was taking advantage.

“I don’t want any regrets when my time comes.” She wrapped her arms around his waist. “If tomorrow is the day, then this could be our last chance. I’ve never said it... but I love you.”

He kissed her again but now his entire body was purely controlled by his desires and need to be close to her. He pushed his hips against hers as his free hand ran down her body from her shoulder to her thigh. They made love on the forest floor; there in the open where there were no restraints, no worries or fears, just the two of them. For a time, they were free and whatever happened, they would go with no regrets.

OH! Lovely...romantic...sexy..excellent! I love it. Wish something like that would happen to me..

I love the part where you said his body was given over to his desires...mmm mmm mm PREFECT! MAgnificent!

cool I like the host. Ever read it?

omg thats really good!! its not even corny (with the circumstances) but i've read alot of books and thats as good as alot of writers i know (if not better!!)

Oh it's glorously cheesy I wouldn't change a thing, moments like this are supposed to be corny! Of course that means it's kinda unbelievable so if you were going for realism you might need to cut down on the gazing and sighing and get straight to the nasty lol but I seriously love it as it is X